考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of some brands of domestic autos. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brand was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen to around 33%, In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of USA’s brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic autos and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese autos will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American autos will likely continue to decrease or remain relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：of domestic autos

批改：此处指的是国内市场，不是国产汽车的品牌，图表还有外国的品牌，此处改为 in the domestic market

原文： brand

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 brands

原文：,

批改：此处为句号

原文： brand

批改：改为 brands

原文：decline

批改：此处缺少动词，改为 experienced a significant decline

原文：USA’s brand

批改：改为 American brands

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：结尾段表达也很好，预测很合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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