2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of type of cars in China. In 2008, the percentage of the cars, which made in Chinawas 25%, but by 2009 this figure had isen to 32.5%. In contrast, the number of the cars which made in Japan experienced a decline of 12.5% during the same period. Simultaneously, the number of the cars of made in the US remained stable and steady.

The core reasons of the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with. In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards consumption have undergone significant changes; they also pursue buying made in China, And they also pride of it which imply our country"s strong. This explain why an increasing number of people choose the cars which madein China. In addition, the cars made in China was cheaper than others. If you have not enough money to buy a Japan car or American car and you have a need of car, which the car you will buy? Chinese car is the piror choose. Considering these factors, the depicted of the phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

What about future trend? I am confident that the number of the cars which made in China will steady increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：isen

批改：拼写错误 “risen”

批改：逗号

原文：I

批改：逗号后首字母小写

原文：piror

批改：拼写错误 “prior”

原文：unsuprising

批改：拼写错误 “unsurprising”

原文：the cars, which made in Chinawas

批改：改为 “the cars made in China”

原文：he cars which made in Japan

批改：“the cars which were made in Japan”或者 “the cars made in Japan”

原文：the number of the cars of made in the US

批改：表述冗余且错误，应为 “the proportion of cars made in the US”

原文：number

批改：混淆 “数量（number）” 与 “占比（percentage/proportion）”，图表描述的是 “占比”，使用percentage/proportion

原文： the cars made in China was cheaper

批改：主谓不一致，应为 “the cars made in China were cheaper”

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of type of cars in China. In 2008, the percentage of the cars, which made in Chinawas 25%, but by 2009 this figure had isen to 32.5%. In contrast, the number of the cars which made in Japan experienced a decline of 12.5% during the same period. Simultaneously, the number of the cars of made in the US remained stable and steady.

批改：描述图表内容，符合题目要求，但是注意描写数据的语言

原文：The core reasons of the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with. In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards consumption have undergone significant changes; they also pursue buying made in China, And they also pride of it which imply our country"s strong. This explain why an increasing number of people choose the cars which madein China. In addition, the cars made in China was cheaper than others. If you have not enough money to buy a Japan car or American car and you have a need of car, which the car you will buy? Chinese car is the piror choose. Considering these factors, the depicted of the phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

批改：使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，条理清晰

原文：What about future trend? I am confident that the number of the cars which made in China will steady increase in the following decades.

批改：预测未来趋势，复合结尾段的内容

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9

这篇图表分析文围绕 “2008-2009 年中国汽车市场不同产地车型占比” 展开，具备基础框架，能捕捉到 “国产汽车占比上升、日系汽车占比下降、美系汽车占比稳定” 的核心数据。但存在大量语法拼写错误、数据表述混乱等问题。注意数量和占比的区别，参考译文描述图表的语言，加强单词的背诵。希望继续努力，加油!

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