2011年考研英语二大作文怎么写？附例文批改

思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

This chart shows that China-made vehicles increased nearly 7% portion in the Chinese market from 2008 to 2009, occupyies one third market portion and become the biggest part of Chinese market. However, Japanese brands declined by 10 percent market portion and behind Chinese brands. American-made haven"t obviously change in market portion.

Recent years, Chinese-brand cars shows better performance, lower price and politer

service, attract lots of customers to purchase domestic cars. After all, only ourselves support Chinese good, our technology would progress fast. Japanese vehicles lost competition because of qualities and relationship-broken, Chinese customers have resist Japanese-made, --Obviously influenced cars" selling. American brands like Ford are only popular in a small circle, they prefer some characters in appearances so they insist their choices. But thats didn"t happen at Japanese because it seems that Chinese brands has chased all aspects.

It"s proud for us to Chinese brands vehicles progress, and we can predict that Chinese-made will occupy more portion in

the future. China must arise again.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：increased nearly 7% portion

批改： ​​increased their market portion by nearly 7%​​

原文：occupyies one third market portion and become

批改：occupying one-third of the market share​​ and ​​becoming​​

原文：by 10 percent market portion and behind Chinese brands

批改： ​​declined by 10% in market share​​ and ​​fell behind​​ Chinese brands.

原文：haven"t obviously change

批改：brands/ cars/ vehicles ​​haven’t changed obviously

原文：This chart shows that China-made vehicles increased nearly 7% portion in the Chinese market from 2008 to 2009, occupyies one third market portion and become the biggest part of Chinese market. However, Japanese brands declined by 10 percent market portion and behind Chinese brands. American-made haven"t obviously change in market portion.

批改：意思对，表达有误

原文：shows

批改：show​​

原文：politer

批改：​​better​​

原文：attract

批改：attracting​

原文：ourselves

批改：反身代词不做主语，改为we

原文：Chinese good, our technology would progress fast.

批改：Chinese brands, our technology ​​will progress rapidly​​.

原文：lost competition

批改： ​​lost in competition​​

原文：,

批改：用句号。

原文：Chinese customers have resist Japanese-made, --Obviously influenced cars" selling

批改：have resisted​​ Japanese-made products, which ​​has obviously influenced

原文：,

批改：此处用句号或者and连接后面句子

原文：Chinese brands has chased all aspects

批改： ​​have chased excellence across all aspects.

原文：Japanese

批改：Japanese brands

原文：Recent years, Chinese-brand cars shows better performance, lower price and politer service, attract lots of customers to purchase domestic cars. After all, only ourselves support Chinese good, our technology would progress fast. Japanese vehicles lost competition because of qualities and relationship-broken, Chinese customers have resist Japanese-made, --Obviously influenced cars" selling. American brands like Ford are only popular in a small circle, they prefer some characters in appearances so they insist their choices. But thats didn"t happen at Japanese because it seems that Chinese brands has chased all aspects.

批改：中文意思有理有据，英文表达错误较多。

原文：It"s proud for us to Chinese brands vehicles progress

批改：We are proud to witness the progress of Chinese brand vehicles,

原文：Chinese-made

批改：加brands或cars

原文：arise

批改：rise

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：5/15分。

1.作文内容包含基本全面，主题明确，建议三段式来写；

2.尝试运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，但错误较多，如定语从句，非谓语动词，标点和固定搭配；

3.衔接不够明显，建议加入连接词，使内容较为连贯；

4.文章原创度很高，很多句型和词汇都是自己写的，值得鼓励。同时要多学习老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，取长补短，减少失误，加油！

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