2013年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二大作文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2013年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart displays the percentage breakdown of the percentage of different grades students work in part time in a certain university. From grade 1 to grade4,

this figure had gradually risen from 67.77% to 88.24%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.

To start with, as the conductor orchestarting the symphony of changes, our government

has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for getting more social practice. In addition, An increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chanes, integrity is indispensable if they wish to get a good job.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and tuthfully reflect the choices of students in university, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：work

批改：working要用非谓语动词形式

原文：The bar chart displays the percentage breakdown of the percentage of different grades students work in part time in a certain university. From grade 1 to grade4, this figure had gradually risen from 67.77% to 88.24%.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：An

批改：首字母小写

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestarting the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for getting more social practice. In addition, An increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chanes, integrity is indispensable if they wish to get a good job.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：tuthfully

批改：truthfully

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and tuthfully reflect the choices of students in university, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

语法：语言表达和语法基础上，进步的空间还很大。比如本次作文中出现多次的单词拼写错误等问题，会很拉低你的平均分。另外还需要注意一些基础的语法问题和表达搭配问题，有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

内容：从图表中可以看出，大四学生兼职的比例远高于他们的师弟师妹们(这也在情理之中)。所以考生可以在作文的中间段分析为什么大四学生兼职的比例明显高于其他年级。当然，考生也可以给出些建议，诸如兼职虽好，但也要理性选择，否则可能会浪费时间和精力。

整体来看，主要是细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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