考研英语一2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2016年考研英语一备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语一大作文话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语一高分写作模板。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

The picture graphically portrays a vivid scenario where in the left picture, there is a father watching TV but asking his son to study hard, with his son not concentrating on his study, while in the right picture, the father and his son are studying hard together. Below the pictures, there is a caption, which says: Set a good example rather than only making requests.

What the above pictures intend to illustrate is that parents should teach children by example. To start with, parents" example enables their children to improve themselves, so they can be qualified for their future job and be likely to achieve more fulfilment. What"s more, as an old saying goes, a good example is the best way of teaching. There is no doubt that parents play a significant role in bringing up their children, For children, action tends to speak louder than words.

In general, it is their duty for parents to set an example for their children so that children can follow the good actions. Only in this way can children make themselves better.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The picture graphically portrays a vivid scenario where in the left picture, there is a father watching TV but asking his son to study hard, with his son not concentrating on his study, while in the right picture, the father and his son are studying hard together. Below the pictures, there is a caption, which says: Set a good example rather than only making requests.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：What the above pictures intend to illustrate is that parents should teach children by example. To start with, parents" example enables their children to improve themselves, so they can be qualified for their future job and be likely to achieve more fulfilment. What"s more, as an old saying goes, a good example is the best way of teaching. There is no doubt that parents play a significant role in bringing up their children, For children, action tends to speak louder than words.

批改：以分论点的形式论述言传身教的重要性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：In general, it is their duty for parents to set an example for their children so that children can follow the good actions. Only in this way can children make themselves better.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：19/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图：

两幅图呈现了两位父亲不同的教育方式，形成了鲜明对比：一个是自己做不到，却徒然口头要求孩子努力学习；另一个则以身作则，默默同孩子一起看书。两幅图的寓意是：父母对孩子的教育应当言传身教、以身作则。也可从以下几个方面展开：父母的表率作用；行动的重要性；父母要真正的关心孩子的教育，而不应只停留在口头上等等。

文章整体来说，言简意赅，符合了考试写作提纲的要求，文章表示语义衔接的词语运用不太多，在以后的写作中可以多尝试使用一些表示衔接的词语，这样文章段落内部句内和段落之间的关系就能很明朗的表现出来。

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