考研英语一2013年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

本文将启航教育一对一批改过的2013年考研英语一高分范文进行公开呈现。批改老师对文中每一个失分细节进行了精确标注，对照考研英语作文批改热点话题与评分细则，你可以快速了解考研英语写作的提分方向。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As the shown in the cartoon, there are many graduates standig front of the crossroads and choosing many ways, which means looking for a job, making a further education, going aboard and starting a business. Evidently the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is choosing a suitable way that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant, On one hand choosing a suitable way can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self fulfilment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, blinding following others not only hinders one"s success, but also acts as an Achilles heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hells.

In biref. choosing a suitable way is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this pratice. Only by doing so can we dovelop individual potential, fulfill our aspirations and create a happier life

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：front

批改：前加in

原文：aboard

批改：abroad

原文：means

批改：include包括

原文：As the shown in the cartoon, there are many graduates standig front of the crossroads and choosing many ways, which means looking for a job, making a further education, going aboard and starting a business. Evidently the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is choosing a suitable way that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：blinding

批改：blindly盲目地

原文：The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant, On one hand choosing a suitable way can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self fulfilment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, blinding following others not only hinders one"s success, but also acts as an Achilles heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hells.

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

批改：逗号

原文：In biref. choosing a suitable way is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this pratice. Only by doing so can we dovelop individual potential, fulfill our aspirations and create a happier life

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意区分形近词汇，固定短语要使用正确，还要注意区分词性；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯，标点符号要使用正确；逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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