2015年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2015年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

This pie chart orderly arranges the information of Spring Festival consumption in a certain city，displaying that New Year gifts account for the highest proportion of consumption, accounting for around 40%, while transportation, dining out, and so on account for a smaller proportion, each accounting for around 20%.

It is a typical wake-up call to send us a significant message that the interpersonal communication during the Spring Festival has aroused wide concern at any corner of our social concensus.

Among the topic concerning the interpersonal communication during the Spring Festival，as the chart shows，the most cardinal tip is related to the issue of the focus of people"s attention on the Spring Festival. To begin with，as time goes by, Chinese people"s emphasis on and maintenance of various relationships during the Chinese New Year has not only been limited to family members, but has also extended to many friends.Apart from,many people choose to go home and have a dinner party with their parents or friends during the New Year, so they also spend some money on transportation and dining.

Considering these general illustrations，we may reasonably arrive at a conclusion that Chinese people will maintain their traditions, gather for meals, give gifts, and celebrate the Spring Festival lively with their family and friends.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：so on

批改：others

原文：This pie chart orderly arranges the information of Spring Festival consumption in a certain city，displaying that New Year gifts account for the highest proportion of consumption, accounting for around 40%, while transportation, dining out, and so on account for a smaller proportion, each accounting for around 20%.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：on

批改：去掉

原文：Apart from

批改：后面要加宾语，不能单独使用，换成In addition

原文：It is a typical wake-up call to send us a significant message that the interpersonal communication during the Spring Festival has aroused wide concern at any corner of our social concensus. Among the topic concerning the interpersonal communication during the Spring Festival，as the chart shows，the most cardinal tip is related to the issue of the focus of people"s attention on the Spring Festival. To begin with，as time goes by, Chinese people"s emphasis on and maintenance of various relationships during the Chinese New Year has not only been limited to family members, but has also extended to many friends.Apart from,many people choose to go home and have a dinner party with their parents or friends during the New Year, so they also spend some money on transportation and dining.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：Considering these general illustrations，we may reasonably arrive at a conclusion that Chinese people will maintain their traditions, gather for meals, give gifts, and celebrate the Spring Festival lively with their family and friends.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结，起到了点题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，注意短语的正确使用，介词避免使用错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础较好。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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