2013年考研英语二大作文实例分析与批改

备战2013年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语二写作高分规划。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the chanses in Part-time job situations among collese students at a centrain university. In the freashmagear, the percentase of students taking part-time jobs was 67.77%, but by the jannior year, this rate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students doing part-time jobs experienced a sisniticant increase of 16:3%o from junior year to the senior year

The core reasons for the observed Phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our coun try"s rapaid and dyhamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are eager to accumlate pratical experience and cult ivate their independent living ablity though part-time jobs. 2h addition, as the saying goes, " On life"s stase, pressure is always present." Nowadoys, University students are compelled to confront Immense economic pressure, and as a result, wattalking. part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for ustil izing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted Phehomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trend? I am contident that the proportion of university students talking part time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： chanses

批改：changes

原文：Part

批改：小写

原文：collese

批改：college

原文：centrain

批改：certain

原文： freashmagear

批改：freshman year

原文：percentase

批改：percentage

原文：jannior

批改：junior

原文：sisniticant

批改：significant

原文：16:3%o

批改：16.31%

原文：contrast

批改：这里对比的关系不是很明显，可改为addition（此外）

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the chanses in Part-time job situations among collese students at a centrain university. In the freashmagear, the percentase of students taking part-time jobs was 67.77%, but by the jannior year, this rate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students doing part-time jobs experienced a sisniticant increase of 16:3%o from junior year to the senior year

批改：最后要加句号。描述了图表内容，但拼写错误较多，表达效果较差

原文：Phenomenon

批改：小写

批改：空格应删除

原文：rapaid

批改：rapid

原文：dyhamic

批改：dynamic

原文：accumlate

批改：accumulate

原文：pratical

批改：practical

批改：空格应删除

原文：ablity

批改：ability

原文：though

批改：through

原文：2h

批改：In

原文：stase

批改：stage

原文：Nowadoys

批改：Nowadays

原文：Immense

批改：小写

原文：wattalking.

批改：taking，句号删除

批改：空格应删除

原文：Phehomenon

批改：小写

原文：trend

批改：要用复数trends

原文：contident

批改：confident

原文：talking

批改：taking

批改：连字符

原文：The core reasons for the observed Phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our coun try"s rapaid and dyhamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are eager to accumlate pratical experience and cult ivate their independent living ablity though part-time jobs. 2h addition, as the saying goes, " On life"s stase, pressure is always present." Nowadoys, University students are compelled to confront Immense economic pressure, and as a result, wattalking. part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for ustil izing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted Phehomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：从积累经验和缓解经济压力两个方面分析学生兼职越来越多的原因，错别字太多了，非常影响表达

原文：What about future trend? I am contident that the proportion of university students talking part time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：表达个人观点，注意拼写问题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：5/15

题目要求：对图表内容的描述较为全面，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文拼写错误太多，严重影响了表达效果，整体表意不是很清晰；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容并，第二段详细论述，第三段呼表达观点，架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；加强单词复习；注提升拼写的准确性；

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