考研英语一2011年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

This is a simple but ironic cartoon, in which there are two young visitors on a travelling boat, appreciating the natural

beauty in front and throwing trash into the lake. Although this is a tourist attraction， the late water behind the tourists becomes exceedingly dirt, with plastic bottles and bags, fish bones, watermelon peels and cans floating on the water . Finally, several Chinese characters can be noticed, which read that this is a trip of discarding waste.

Such a scenario,apparently,can be associated with some citizens’ low quality and their behaviors are characterized by their pollution to the environment. Admittedly, in the contemporary society, a host of traveler’s terrible behaviors are frequently reported by various media, such as leaving rushish everywhere,

smoking and talking loudly in public palces.

This phenomenon is particularly worth attention for the reason that these people just focus on their own comfort and enjoyment.,ignoring the significance of public virtue. In fact,

it is their immoral practice that causes others

not to enjoy the healthy and clean environment.

Accordingly,as a youngster, I deem that it is advisable for all people to comply

ralated regulations to love, respert and

protect our common homeland -the earth. Meanwhile,society as a whole should foster a positive atmosphere to inspire and educate residents to obey public virtues.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：dirt,

批改：dirty

原文： is a simple but ironic cartoon, in which there are two young visitors on a travelling boat, appreciating the natural beauty in front and throwing trash into the lake. Although this is a tourist attraction， the late water behind the tourists becomes exceedingly dirt, with plastic bottles and bags, fish bones, watermelon peels and cans floating on the water . Finally, several Chinese characters can be noticed, which read that this is a trip of discarding waste.

批改：对图画内容描述的很全面，且能够清晰点明主题。

原文：traveler’s

批改：travelers’

原文：rushish

批改：rubbish

原文：palces

批改：places

原文：comply

批改：comply是不及物动词，后加宾语时需要借助介词with

原文：henomenon is particularly worth attention for the reason that these people just focus on their own comfort and enjoyment.,ignoring the significance of public virtue. In fact, it is their immoral practice that causes others not to enjoy the healthy and clean environment. Accordingly,as a youngster, I deem that it is advisable for all people to comply ralated regulations to love, respert and protect our common homeland -the earth. Meanwhile,society as a whole should foster a positive atmosphere to inspire and educate residents to obey public virtues.

批改：该段落既能分析图画背后的深层次原因又能够提出自己的建议，内容很全面。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误，还要多积累固定的短语，如comply with遵守；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意区分词性。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。中间段落如能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，会使得结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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