考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2016年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作冲刺话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

52. As can be seen in the pie chart, there are some data. The data presents on the travel purpose of a college students in spare time. Apparently, the persentage 37 students choose to appreciate landscape, persentage 33 students choose to relieve study pressure, while a small proportion students cultivate indepentce ability and make friends broadly. Meanwhile, some students are fond of doing someing their favourite.

These trend can he attributed to several factors. To begin with, in the contemporary society, more and more students have their own hobbies, which enables them to opt a variety of activities. Secondly, what is important is they possess abuntant time when they can make plans to intend to go to where.Last but not least, it is travel outside that is an effective way to relieve study pressure and broaden their horizon.

In conclusion, travel outside is an effective path to develop students physical and mental health. And This phenomenon will be more popular.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： presents on the travel purpose of a

批改： show the travel purposes of ​​college students

原文：the persentage 37 students

批改：37% of students

原文：persentage 33 students

批改： 33% choose

原文：students

批改：of students

原文： indepentce ability

批改：independence

原文：someing their favourite

批改：something​​ their favorites

原文：52. As can be seen in the pie chart, there are some data. The data presents on the travel purpose of a college students in spare time. Apparently, the persentage 37 students choose to appreciate landscape, persentage 33 students choose to relieve study pressure, while a small proportion students cultivate indepentce ability and make friends broadly. Meanwhile, some students are fond of doing someing their favourit

批改：未能准确描述图表内容

原文：These trend can he

批改：​​These trends​​ can ​​be​

原文：opt

批改：opt for​​

原文： they possess abuntant time

批改： ​​that​​ they have ​​abundant​​ time，表语从句that在正式写作中不能省略，避免引起歧义

原文：go to where

批改：where to go

原文：travel outside

批改：raveling outside 动名词

原文：horizon

批改：复数

原文：These trend can he attributed to several factors. To begin with, in the contemporary society, more and more students have their own hobbies, which enables them to opt a variety of activities. Secondly, what is important is they possess abuntant time when they can make plans to intend to go to where.Last but not least, it is travel outside that is an effective way to relieve study pressure and broaden their horizon.

批改：语法结构丰富，注意错误

原文： travel outside is an effective path to develop students physical and mental health

批改：traveling outside is an effective way to ...

原文：This

批改：this

原文：n conclusion, travel outside is an effective path to develop students physical and mental health. And This phenomenon will be more popular.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明,建议多写一两句话，刚刚160字；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，主语从句，非谓语结构和强调句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.章原创度很高，很多句型和词汇都是自己写的，值得鼓励。同时要多学习老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，取长补短，减少失误，加油！

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