考研英语二2011年大作文怎么写？附例文批改

面对2011年考研英语二大作文，许多同学最关心的是有没有可复制的写作模板。本文带来的高分范文严格遵循启航考研英语高分框架，从开头引入、主体论证到结尾呼应，全文清晰流畅，是考研英语考生的必备学习资料。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The column chart illustrates the brand proportion of domestic car market from 2008 to 2009,from which we can draw three conclusions: First, the percentage of Chinese brand increased obviously reaching approximately 33%. By contrast, the sale of Japanese brand showed a sharply decline from 35% to 26%. Meanwhile, the proportion of American brand maintained stable at 12% .

These trends can be attributed to several reasons. To begin with, with the rapid development of technology, Chinese car producting in dustry have possessed a strong basis that we can make parts by ourselves. Secondly, it is advisable for us to improve our own brand proportion in whole market. What’s more, it is no exaggeration to say that paying more attention to ourselves advance is particularly significant. Last but not least, it is foreign brand that should also continue to be introduced.

To sum up, paying more attention to ourselves advance is the only way to improve proportion in the domestic market and this steady increase trend for Chinese brand presents our car producting industry to be better

than before.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：sharply

批改：sharp形容词修饰decline

原文：e column chart illustrates the brand proportion of domestic car market from 2008 to 2009,from which we can draw three conclusions: First, the percentage of Chinese brand increased obviously reaching approximately 33%. By contrast, the sale of Japanese brand showed a sharply decline from 35% to 26%. Meanwhile, the proportion of American brand maintained stable at 12% .

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：in dustry

批改：改成复数industries

原文：producting

批改：producing

原文： that we can make parts by ourselves.

批改：定语从句 “that we can make parts by ourselves” 用来修饰 “a strong basis”，但 “基础” 本身不能等同于 “我们能自主生产零件” 这一动作，逻辑上应为 “基础使我们能自主生产零件” 或 “基础是我们能自主生产零件”，直接用 “that” 引导从句会导致修饰关系模糊，建议改成：a strong basis that enables us to make parts by ourselves

原文：our own brand proportion

批改：the proportion of our own brand

原文：ourselves

批改：反身代词不能直接作定语修饰名词，改成our own

原文：hese trends can be attributed to several reasons. To begin with, with the rapid development of technology, Chinese car producting in dustry have possessed a strong basis that we can make parts by ourselves. Secondly, it is advisable for us to improve our own brand proportion in whole market. What’s more, it is no exaggeration to say that paying more attention to ourselves advance is particularly significant. Last but not least, it is foreign brand that should also continue to be introduced.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：ourselves

批改：our own

原文：producting

批改：producing

原文： sum up, paying more attention to ourselves advance is the only way to improve proportion in the domestic market and this steady increase trend for Chinese brand presents our car producting industry to be better than before

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结并提出自己的建议。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，注意区分词性以及词性之间的正确修饰关系；句式方面和语法方面，要注意定语从句的正确使用。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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