考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二作文真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The line clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic car was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen to 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanse car experienced a significant slow of 9% during the same period.Simultaneously the percentage of American car remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conducter orchestrating the symphony of changes, our governoment has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace,allowing them to afford automobies that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundmental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Japanse car

批改：使用复数 “Japanese cars”

原文：a significant slow of 9%

批改：“slow of 9%” 表述错误（“slow” 为形容词 / 动词，此处需表 “下降”），应改为 “decline of 9%”

原文：conducter

批改：拼写错误 “conductor”

原文：governoment

批改：拼写错误 “government”

原文：fundmental

批改：拼写错误 “fundamental”

原文：automobies

批改：拼写错误 “automobiles”

原文：American car

批改：复数 cars

原文：domestic car

批改：复数 cars

原文：line

批改：line chart 线性表

原文：The line clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic car was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen to 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanse car experienced a significant slow of 9% during the same period.Simultaneously the percentage of American car remained stable and steady.

批改：描述图表内容，符合题目要求

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conducter orchestrating the symphony of changes, our governoment has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace,allowing them to afford automobies that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundmental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes.

批改：使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，表达了自己的观点，条理清晰

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to decrease.

批改：对未来趋势表示推测，符合结尾段落的内容

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

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