2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the market proportion of a car brand in China from 2008 to 2021. In 2008, the percentage of the national brand was 25%, but by 2021, this figure had substantially risen to 33%. In contrast, the percentage of the Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of 10%, while the percentage of the American brand remain stable and steady during the same time.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound national car system, enabling the car made in China to cater to the demands of Chinese people. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic car and have become the primary consumer group.

Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of the national car brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign car brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a car brand

批改：car brands

原文：remain

批改：过去时remained

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the market proportion of a car brand in China from 2008 to 2021. In 2008, the percentage of the national brand was 25%, but by 2021, this figure had substantially risen to 33%. In contrast, the percentage of the Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of 10%, while the percentage of the American brand remain stable and steady during the same time.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound national car system, enabling the car made in China to cater to the demands of Chinese people. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic car and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of the national car brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign car brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，注意时态的正确选取。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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