考研英语一2016年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2016年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一作文真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

As is vividly illustrated in the cartoon given above, in the left side when the son is studying, the father is watching TV. The son is very unhappy. While in the picture on the right, the father and the son are studying together and the son is willing to do it.

As far as i am concerned，i reckon that instead of making a demand only, parents should set an example to their kids. Generally, parents consider that they have learned in their childhood, so they don"t need to learn. Also, they are extremely tired after a whole day of work, so the time after work should be their time to take a rest. However, the children don’t understand the underlying reason. They only believe what they see. It is the fact that when I"m studying, my parents don"t have to study but they are playing. They may feel unbalanced. But if parents set an example to their kids. Learn something when they are studying. On the one hand, it can create a quiet environment and a learning atmosphere for the child, making the child feel that learning is not lonely, boring or dull, but rather accompanied by someone. On the other hand, it can remind the child that learning plays a key role in their life and it is not something that can be done in a short period of time. Just like the proverb says, "one keeps learning as long as one lives". This can help cultivate the child"s good habit of enjoying learning.

All analyses presented above convince parents that they should set themselves an example to their kids.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As is vividly illustrated in the cartoon given above, in the left side when the son is studying, the father is watching TV. The son is very unhappy. While in the picture on the right, the father and the son are studying together and the son is willing to do it.

批改：对漫画内容描述的很全面，语言连贯。

原文：But if parents set an example to their kids.

批改：这句话只有从句，没有主句

原文：Learn something when they are studying.

批改：这句话不完整

原文：Generally, parents consider that they have learned in their childhood, so they don"t need to learn. Also, they are extremely tired after a whole day of work, so the time after work should be their time to take a rest. However, the children don’t understand the underlying reason. They only believe what they see. It is the fact that when I"m studying, my parents don"t have to study but they are playing. They may feel unbalanced. But if parents set an example to their kids. Learn something when they are studying. On the one hand, it can create a quiet environment and a learning atmosphere for the child, making the child feel that learning is not lonely, boring or dull, but rather accompanied by someone. On the other hand, it can remind the child that learning plays a key role in their life and it is not something that can be done in a short period of time. Just like the proverb says, "one keeps learning as long as one lives". This can help cultivate the child"s good habit of enjoying learning.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述

原文：All analyses presented above convince parents that they should set themselves an example to their kids.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，注意句子结构的完整连贯，主从句是一句话，不能分开单独使用；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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