考研英语二2016年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2016年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

2016大作文

As is shown in the pie chart, 37% of students travel to enjoy scenery, while 33% aim to relieve pressure. Making friends and developing skills are also included, but they only account for 9% and 6%, taking up a very small portion.

As far as I am concerned, I reckon that the high proportions

of enjoying scenery and relieving pressure are due to the increasing study pressure. Students are under increasing academic pressure with more and more exams. Therefore, the time spent on studying and reviewing each day should take up the majority of their time. And also they are exposed to the peer pressure. Enjoying the scenery and stareing at the green trees enable them to reduce stress, relax and feel happy.

The reason why the proportions of making friends and developing abilities are small is that they want to have their own personal space. Every day, they compare themselves with different people. When they have some free time, they often want to stay alone.

To sum up, travel has become a go-to choice for students to escape their heavy academic and peer pressure and it can fit their current needs well.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As is shown in the pie chart, 37% of students travel to enjoy scenery, while 33% aim to relieve pressure. Making friends and developing skills are also included, but they only account for 9% and 6%, taking up a very small portion.

批改：清晰简要地描述了图表信息，言简意赅。

原文：stareing

批改：staring

原文：As far as I am concerned, I reckon that the high proportions of enjoying scenery and relieving pressure are due to the increasing study pressure. Students are under increasing academic pressure with more and more exams. Therefore, the time spent on studying and reviewing each day should take up the majority of their time. And also they are exposed to the peer pressure. Enjoying the scenery and stareing at the green trees enable them to reduce stress, relax and feel happy. The reason why the proportions of making friends and developing abilities are small is that they want to have their own personal space. Every day, they compare themselves with different people. When they have some free time, they often want to stay alone.

批改：能够详细分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：To sum up, travel has become a go-to choice for students to escape their heavy academic and peer pressure and it can fit their current needs well.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结，起到了点题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，基础句式结构掌握的不错；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。如能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，会更符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。

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