考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in different shares among certain market brands in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009. this rate had gradually risen around 30%. In contrast , the proportion of Japanese brands experienced has significant decreased about 10%. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound economic system, enabling populance to afford Chinese brands car that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition,In the wake of the high-speed advancemend of society, people"s attitudes consumption. toward Chinese cars have a undergone significant changes, This explains why an increasing number of people choosing are Chinese cars rather than foreign cars. Considering these factors, the depictsed phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the percentage of Chinese brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：hat about future trends? I am confident that the percentage of Chinese brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands will likely continue to decrease.

批改：预测趋势，呼应主题

原文：advancemend

批改：advancement

原文： attitudes

批改：加towards

原文：consumption. toward Chinese cars

批改：这里矛盾

原文：a

批改：删除a

原文：in different shares among certain market brands

批改：changes in the market share of different car brands

批改：逗号

原文：experienced has significant decreased

批改：experienced和decreased重复矛盾

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in different shares among certain market brands in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009. this rate had gradually risen around 30%. In contrast , the proportion of Japanese brands experienced has significant decreased about 10%. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

批改：较准确描述了图表内容

原文：brands car

批改：car brands 顺序反了

原文：In

批改：in

原文：are

批改：删除

原文：depictsed

批改：depicted

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound economic system, enabling populance to afford Chinese brands car that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition,In the wake of the high-speed advancemend of society, people"s attitudes consumption. toward Chinese cars have a undergone significant changes, This explains why an increasing number of people choosing are Chinese cars rather than foreign cars. Considering these factors, the depictsed phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：论点清晰，注意拼写和语法错误

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，注意拼写和语法错误；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行为流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要深刻吃透老师的模板，使用自己的语言，灵活运用在各类题目中，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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