考研英语二2011年大作文实例分析与批改

备战2011年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语二写作高分规划。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of different brand of the domestic driving car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period.Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress

made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in table is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：different brand

批改：很多不同的品牌，用复数“different brands”

原文：driving

批改：可删去

原文：domestic brand

批改：单复数错误（应为 “domestic brands”）

原文：Japanese brand

批改：单复数错误（应为 “Japanese brands”）

原文：American brand

批改：单复数错误（应为 “American brands”）

原文：goverment

批改：拼写错误（应为 “government”）

原文：is undergoing

批改：时态错误（描述 2008-2009 年的变化，应为 “was undergoing”）

原文：table

批改：用词错误（图表为柱状图，应为 “chart”）

原文：domestic brand

批改： “domestic brands”

原文：Japanese brand

批改：“Japanese brands”

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of different brand of the domestic driving car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period.Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

批改：描述图表内容，符合题目要求

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in table is unsurprising.

批改：提出了自己的观点，使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，条理较为清晰

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：对未来趋势表示预测，符合结尾段的内容和结构

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

这篇图表分析文围绕 “2008-2009 年国内汽车市场品牌占比变化” 展开，框架完整，能准确捕捉 “国产品牌上升、日系品牌下降、美系品牌稳定” 的核心趋势，但存在一些问题：单复数错误频发（如 “brand” 误用），基础语法不扎实。写完整体检查一遍，希望继续努力，加油！

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