考研英语一2013年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2013年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are many graduates standing on the road of future and selecting one, with finding a job 、continuing study,、going abroad and starting business. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that right choice plays an important role in our personal life and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, right choice can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What’s more, lack of right choice is not merely a chronic poision that stifles potential, but also the Achilles’heel of many youth. It silently erodes opportunities while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide.

In brief, right choice is the catalyst for societal and personal development ,from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop our potential and fulfill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：one

批改：a path

原文：continuing study,、going abroad and starting business

批改：continuing their studies, going abroad, and starting a business.

原文： right choice

批改： ​​making the

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there are many graduates standing on the road of future and selecting one, with finding a job 、continuing study,、going abroad and starting business. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that right choice plays an important role in our personal life and in society.

批改：较准确描述了漫画内容

原文：right choice

批改：加the

原文：right

批改：the right

原文：poision

批改：poison

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, right choice can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What’s more, lack of right choice is not merely a chronic poision that stifles potential, but also the Achilles’heel of many youth. It silently erodes opportunities while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide.

批改：词汇和语法结构丰富

原文：right

批改：the right

原文：In brief, right choice is the catalyst for societal and personal development ,from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop our potential and fulfill our aspirations.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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