考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二写作冲刺每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2016年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of traveling at certain university. Viewing landscape takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factor such as else, making friends and cultivating the quality of independence are also considered, accounting for 15%,9% and 6%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound traveling system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for traveling. In addition, as the saying goes. “On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowdays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, travling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phonomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：factor

批改：复数factors

原文：else

批改：else是形容词，改成名词others

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of traveling at certain university. Viewing landscape takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factor such as else, making friends and cultivating the quality of independence are also considered, accounting for 15%,9% and 6%, respectively.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：travling

批改：traveling

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound traveling system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for traveling. In addition, as the saying goes. “On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowdays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, travling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phonomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数注意正确选取以及区分词性；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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