2014年考研英语二大作文怎么写？附例文批改

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一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of population in China"s urban and rural during the past twenty years. In 1990, the number of population in urban was approximately 300 million, but by 2000, this figure had gradually risen to 458 million, and it had risen to 666 million when it came to 2010. Meanwhile, the number of population in rural experienced a significant decline about 374 million from 1990 to 2010.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a better infrastracture in cities, enabling rural residents who hope to possess more comfortable environment. In addition, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choose urban rather than countryside.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of population in urban will steadily increase in the following decades. Meanwhile, we should take in account the impact of the decline in rural population on agriculture and husbandry.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：urban 和rural是形容词，后应该加上areas

原文：during the past twenty years

批改：从现在来看并不是过去的二十年，严格来说不够准确，应该改成：from 1990 to 2010

批改：后加areas

批改：后加areas

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of population in China"s urban and rural during the past twenty years. In 1990, the number of population in urban was approximately 300 million, but by 2000, this figure had gradually risen to 458 million, and it had risen to 666 million when it came to 2010. Meanwhile, the number of population in rural experienced a significant decline about 374 million from 1990 to 2010.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：enabling rural residents who hope to possess more comfortable environment.

批改：这句话没说完，enabling sb to do sth，句子不完整

原文：people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue spiritual enjoyment.

批改：这句话作为后面那句话的支撑论据，似乎难以成立，起不到说服的作用。

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a better infrastracture in cities, enabling rural residents who hope to possess more comfortable environment. In addition, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choose urban rather than countryside

批改：要注意论点的合理性

批改：加areas

原文：in

批改：in改成into，take into account是固定短语

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the number of population in urban will steadily increase in the following decades. Meanwhile, we should take in account the impact of the decline in rural population on agriculture and husbandry.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，要注意区分词性及其用法以及固定短语的正确使用；句式方面，要注意句子结构的完整，不要缺少成分；

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题，还要对图表中的时间信息表述正确。再接再厉。

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