考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

There are two pictures that show different people facing books.The first picture shows one man lying in front of many books and said:”How could I got so many books!”. Another picture shows another man sitting on a chair, facing only four books.As he is reading those books,he said:”I will try my best to read 20 books this year.” There is a short sentence beneath the pictures:”Own books and read books”.

These pictures intend to tell us possessing many books means nothing if you don’t read them. Books are born to be read. Reading some books in a planned way is much better than getting a lot of books but never read them. In my opinion,if you don’t read books, those books are just a bunch of garbage or a delicate vase which can’t help on anything. The best way to use a book is to read it, just lying in front of them will not make you knowledgeable.And it would be great if we can make a reading plan just like the man on the right picture.

Books are not how much you have, but about how you use them. We should not buy books for the sake of buying books, we should read them, no matter how much we have.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： lying

批改：加谓语，改成is lying

原文：said

批改：现在时says

原文：How could I got so many books

批改：I have so many books!

原文：said

批改：says

原文：There are two pictures that show different people facing books.The first picture shows one man lying in front of many books and said:”How could I got so many books!”. Another picture shows another man sitting on a chair, facing only four books.As he is reading those books,he said:”I will try my best to read 20 books this year.” There is a short sentence beneath the pictures:”Own books and read books”.

批改：能够完整描述出图画中的内容，注意避免小的语言问题。

原文：read

批改：reading

原文：just

批改：前加and连接两个并列分句

原文：These pictures intend to tell us possessing many books means nothing if you don’t read them. Books are born to be read. Reading some books in a planned way is much better than getting a lot of books but never read them. In my opinion,if you don’t read books, those books are just a bunch of garbage or a delicate vase which can’t help on anything. The best way to use a book is to read it, just lying in front of them will not make you knowledgeable.And it would be great if we can make a reading plan just like the man on the right picture.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。

原文：much

批改：many修饰可数名词，改成many

原文：we

批改：前加逻辑关系词instead，表示相反

原文：much

批改：many

原文：Books are not how much you have, but about how you use them. We should not buy books for the sake of buying books, we should read them, no matter how much we have.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误，注意many修饰可数名词，much修饰不可数名词；句式和语法方面，注意描述图画时时态的正确选取，以及两个分句之间用连接词连接。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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