考研英语一2024年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一写作冲刺每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2024年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left cartoon shows that a boy is expressig his full of happiness feelings about a new community"s park, while two persons are runing at the park. In the right line table indicates that the number of the city park has increased 264 from 2020 to 2022. This phenomenon embodies that more and more health lifestyle grab attenton.

First and foremost, in modern society full of changes, chances and challenges, keeping body health is a key to balance our life and work. What is more, the country choosing to built more and more community"s park is benefit to citizen to enjoy their spare time. Last but not least, our country should spread a new creative community"s lifesyle. Hopefully, the user of community"s park can conprehen its importance.

Finally, this phenomenon is a great situation for our country. Meanwhile, our citizen should also take an act-ion to enjoy and utilize these park. I believe that the number of community park will be increase continute.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In

批改：去掉

原文：In

批改：去掉

原文：park

批改：the number of加名词复数，改成parks

原文：more and more health lifestyle grab attenton.

批改：health lifestyle grabs more and more attenton

原文：In the left cartoon shows that a boy is expressig his full of happiness feelings about a new community"s park, while two persons are runing at the park. In the right line table indicates that the number of the city park has increased 264 from 2020 to 2022. This phenomenon embodies that more and more health lifestyle grab attenton.

批改：注意in the left/right cartoon是状语，不能做主语，需改成名词形式

原文：built

批改：不定式后加动词原形改成build

原文：park

批改：parks

原文：benefit

批改：改成形容词beneficial

原文：citizen

批改：复数

原文：user

批改：use

原文：conprehen

批改：单词错误

原文：First and foremost, in modern society full of changes, chances and challenges, keeping body health is a key to balance our life and work. What is more, the country choosing to built more and more community"s park is benefit to citizen to enjoy their spare time. Last but not least, our country should spread a new creative community"s lifesyle. Hopefully, the user of community"s park can conprehen its importance.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言问题。

原文：citizen

批改：复数

原文：park

批改：复数

原文：park

批改：parks

原文：be increase continute

批改：continue to increase

原文：Finally, this phenomenon is a great situation for our country. Meanwhile, our citizen should also take an act-ion to enjoy and utilize these park. I believe that the number of community park will be increase continute.

批改：该段能够针对图画现象提出自己的解决措施。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误以及名词单复数的正确使用，还要注意区分词性；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意to不定式后加动词原形。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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