考研英语一2013年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2013年考研英语一大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there some graduates sitting the life road and facing many choices, such as starting a business, taking part in the Postgraduate Admission Test, looking for a job, and going abroad. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it it is choosing a suitable path that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hard, in the morden society full of changes, chances,and challenges, choosing a suitable path is a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and it signifcance has become increasingly evident. On the orther hand, blindly following others is like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, leaving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, choosing a suitable path is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop

indvidual potential and fulill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加are

原文：sitting

批改：standing at

原文：it

批改：去掉

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there some graduates sitting the life road and facing many choices, such as starting a business, taking part in the Postgraduate Admission Test, looking for a job, and going abroad. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it it is choosing a suitable path that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：morden

批改：modern

原文：it

批改：its

原文：orther

批改：other

原文：The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hard, in the morden society full of changes, chances,and challenges, choosing a suitable path is a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and it signifcance has become increasingly evident. On the orther hand, blindly following others is like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, leaving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：fulill

批改：fulfill

原文：In brief, choosing a suitable path is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop indvidual potential and fulill our aspirations.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，注意句子结构的完整连贯，不要缺少成分；逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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