考研英语一2013年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2013年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语作文真题范文的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there are some graduates on the road. The road have four choose, the four choose will lead the graduates to the different furture. Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that fitting ourself Choose is the brush that paints a bright furture, while unfitted choose is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant, on the one hand, unfitted choose is like a heavy chain that hinders graduate"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in furture Society, significantly affecting its competivativeness. On the other hands. In modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, fitting ourself choose has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increaseingly evident. Fitting ourself choose can ignite our creative and promote personal growth and selt-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being lelf-consuming.

In brief, fitting ourself choose is the caralyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benifit, Therefore, we should actively Support and advocate this practice. additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of unfitted choose to ensure our growth stays on course

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： on the road. The road have four choose, the four choose will lead the graduates to the different furture.

批改：润润色，standing at a crossroads with four distinct paths—each leading to a different future.

原文： fitting ourself Choose

批改：choose是动词，改为动名词choosing a suitable path

原文：unfitted choose

批改：choosing a wrong path或者an ill-fitting choice

原文：, on

批改：句号，后面On首字母大写

原文：unfitted choose

批改：an ill-fitting choice

原文：. In

批改：逗号，in小写

原文：fitting ourself choose

批改：choosing a suitable path

原文：Fitting ourself choose

批改：Choosing a suitable path

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant, on the one hand, unfitted choose is like a heavy chain that hinders graduate"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in furture Society, significantly affecting its competivativeness. On the other hands. In modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, fitting ourself choose has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increaseingly evident. Fitting ourself choose can ignite our creative and promote personal growth and selt-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being lelf-consuming.

批改：论点很清晰，注意关键词要写对

原文： fitting ourself choose

批改：choosing a suitable path

原文：Support

批改：首字母小写

原文：additionally

批改：首字母大写

原文：unfitted choose

批改：an ill-fitting choice

原文：In brief, fitting ourself choose is the caralyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benifit, Therefore, we should actively Support and advocate this practice. additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of unfitted choose to ensure our growth stays on course

批改：注意拼写

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，核心关键词尽量写对；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，非谓语结构很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要深刻吃透老师的模板，使用自己的语言，灵活运用在各类题目中，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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