考研英语一2013年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2013年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture,there are many graduates,standing there blankly and facing different choices of their lives in the future,including looking for jobs,continuing study,going abroad and starting a business.Evidently,the picture intends to convey to readers that it is rational choices that can exert a great influence both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,right choices can ignite graduates’ creativity,and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment,rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand,in modern society full of changes,chances and challenges,doing rational choices has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people,and its significance has become increasingly evident.

In brief,right choices is the catalyst for societal and personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should actively support and advocate this practice;additionally,we must be acutely aware of detrimental effects of unreasonable choices to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：there blankly

批改：改为 at the crossroads of life 更准确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

批改：语法正确

原文：rather than

批改：建议改为 thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than 补上少写的部分

原文：doing

批改：与 choice 搭配的动词是 make, 此处要写为 making

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：right choices is

批改：此处主谓不一致，可改为 making right choices is

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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