考研英语一2017年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2017年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left hand cartoon ,there is a younger man,sitting on the chair and boasting that he owns a large number of books.On the contrary,the younger man is making a yearly plan of

reading 20 books .Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is a brush that paints bright future for us,while daydreaming is a shackle that hinders us progress.

The phenomenon is thought provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,being practice can ignite our creativities , promote personal growth and self fulfillment,thus making our life rewarding and meaningful.On the other hand,daydreaming is a heavy chain that hinders our development,leaving us with negative outlook on life and preventing us from shining brightly in future society.

In brief,being practical is a cataylst for society and personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should support and advocate the practical.Additionally,we must acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure our growth stays on course.

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三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加连字符

原文：n the left hand cartoon ,there is a younger man,sitting on the chair and boasting that he owns a large number of books.On the contrary,the younger man is making a yearly plan of reading 20 books .Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is a brush that paints bright future for us,while daydreaming is a shackle that hinders us progress.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：us

批改：改成our我们的

批改：加连字符

原文：practice

批改：practical

批改：加连字符

原文：The phenomenon is thought provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,being practice can ignite our creativities , promote personal growth and self fulfillment,thus making our life rewarding and meaningful.On the other hand,daydreaming is a heavy chain that hinders our development,leaving us with negative outlook on life and preventing us from shining brightly in future society.

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

原文：the

批改：being

批改：加be

原文：In brief,being practical is a cataylst for society and personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should support and advocate the practical.Additionally,we must acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：该段再次总结强调写作的中心，起到了点题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意合成词需加连字符连接；句式方面，注意句子结构的完整连贯，不要缺少成分；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。