考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2016年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二作文范文话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purpose of students at a certain university. Enjoying scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relience pressure at 33% Additionally, factors such as taking friends, making alone ability and others are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6% and 15% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, As the saying goes. "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transtormation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s traveling incustry in responding to these changes Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

what about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stoble in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：purpose

批改：复数

批改：加travel among

原文：relience

批改：relieving

原文：taking

批改：making

原文：making alone ability

批改：cultivating independence

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purpose of students at a certain university. Enjoying scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relience pressure at 33% Additionally, factors such as taking friends, making alone ability and others are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6% and 15% respectively.

批改：在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。

原文：As

批改：逗号后单词首字母小写

原文：transtormation

批改：transformation

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, As the saying goes. "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transtormation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s traveling incustry in responding to these changes Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：what about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stoble in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，注意图表内容的正确表达；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意句子结构的完整；语法方面，总体来看语法基础还不错

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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