考研英语一2010年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2010年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a culture’s hot pot, filled with many cultural elements, including Lao She, Kong fu, Dao, Shakespeare and so on. Evidently, the cartoon intends to convey to readers that it is traditional culture that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and society.

The phenomenon is though-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, while certain culture may be outdated, the culture of intergrity is one that should never lose its luster, as it is a crucial shaping the admirable character of the Chinese’s people. What is more, culture can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming.

In brief, culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Kong

批改：kung

原文：Dao

批改：道教taoism

原文：traditional culture

批改：不仅仅是传统文化，主题词应该是cultural fusion文化融合或cultural exchange文化交流

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is a culture’s hot pot, filled with many cultural elements, including Lao She, Kong fu, Dao, Shakespeare and so on. Evidently, the cartoon intends to convey to readers that it is traditional culture that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and society.

批改：能够完整描述出图画中的内容，语言连贯，注意正确选取主题词。

原文：though

批改：thought

批改：缺少piece

原文：the culture of intergrity

批改：主题词又变了

原文：The phenomenon is though-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, while certain culture may be outdated, the culture of intergrity is one that should never lose its luster, as it is a crucial shaping the admirable character of the Chinese’s people. What is more, culture can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming.

批改：论述的内容一定要和主题词相关

批改：这里要用句号断句

原文：In brief, culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

批改：该段能够针对图画现象提出自己的解决措施

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，注意句子结构的完整以及正确断句；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好，要注意选取合适的主题词。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。