思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向,本文呈现的2010年考研英语一批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面,逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。
一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目
考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文
As shown in the picture, there is a hot pot, which full many cards, such as kong fu, protocol. Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that it is the culture that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.
This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, various cultures hold exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for boosting overall national strength, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. What is more, cultures can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. Last but not least, the culture of integrity is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bond that keeps the Chinese nation thriving.
In brief, the culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:which full many cards
批改:which is full of many cards
原文: kong fu, protocol
批改:Kung fu, 后面那个不知道是啥
原文:culture
批改:cultural integration 主题词是文化融合
原文:As shown in the picture, there is a hot pot, which full many cards, such as kong fu, protocol. Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that it is the culture that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.
批改:未能准确呈现漫画的内容和寓意
原文:various cultures
批改:建议改为cultural integration
原文:cultures
批改:cultural integration
原文:ulture of integrity
批改:cultural integration
原文:This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, various cultures hold exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for boosting overall national strength, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. What is more, cultures can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. Last but not least, the culture of integrity is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bond that keeps the Chinese nation thriving.
批改:论据充分,词汇和句法丰富
原文: the culture
批改:cultural integration
原文:traditional culture
批改:cultural integration ,不只是要弘扬传统文化
原文:In brief, the culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
批改:good
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:15/20分。
1.作文内容包含全面,层次分明,要全篇突出cultural integration的主题;
2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇,定语从句,状语从句,倒装句,非谓语结构和强调句句型很棒;
3.采用恰当的衔接手法,内容较为连贯;
4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型,灵活运用,丰富自己的语料库和写作思路,加油!
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