考研英语一2011年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2011年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语写作冲刺的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are two tourists, sitting on a boat and throwing garbage into the water, which pollutes the river. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society. This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economic interests, have disregarded the importance of protecting the environment.What is more, environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress,not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image. How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related laws and strengthening the guiding role of the media in public opinion. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality, we also need to foster the virtue of protecting the environment deliberately. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there are two tourists, sitting on a boat and throwing garbage into the water, which pollutes the river. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economic interests, have disregarded the importance of protecting the environment.What is more, environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress,not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related laws and strengthening the guiding role of the media in public opinion. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality, we also need to foster the virtue of protecting the environment deliberately. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。作文建议采取三段式，不要把所有内容都堆砌在一段，会导致重点不突出，结构不清晰

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图，但作文建议采取三段式，不要把所有内容都堆砌在一段，会导致重点不突出，结构不清晰

内容：这幅漫画中细节比较多，但最核心的内容比较明确，那就是旅游过程中游客的不恰当行为造成环境污染。该图显示水面上有一艘观光船，两个游客随手乱扔垃圾，水面上漂浮着各种各样的废弃物。很多考生拿到试卷后的第一反应就是写如何保护环境，再细心一点的考生就写成如何保护景区环境。可是，这幅图不仅要强调被破坏的环境，还要强调造成这种环境污染的缘由——游客甚至是人类的不恰当行为。这样表达文章意思才全面。

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