考研英语一2010年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2010年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a hotpot that fulfill different cultures such as kongfu, enlightenment education, kindness. Evidently, the cartoonist intent to convey to readers that it is diversity cultures in the word that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, diversity cultures can nurture our souls, promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making us life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being consuming. What is more, diversity cultures holds that exceptional significantly for world, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for shaping people’s morals, further propelling social stability and sustainable development.

In brief, diversity cultures is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should activity promote and carry forward diversity cultures. Only by doing can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：fulfill

批改：充满是fill，需要注意主谓一致，fills

原文：intent

批改：intends

原文：diversity cultures

批改：culture diversity文化多样性

原文：word

批改：world

原文：play

批改：plays

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is a hotpot that fulfill different cultures such as kongfu, enlightenment education, kindness. Evidently, the cartoonist intent to convey to readers that it is diversity cultures in the word that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：对图画中的细节描述的很全面，但是要避免语言错误。

原文：diversity cultures

批改：culture diversity

原文：us

批改：our

原文：consuming

批改：self-consuming

原文：diversity cultures

批改：culture diversity

原文：that

批改：不需要从句，删去

原文：significantly

批改：前面的形容词修饰名词，改成significance

原文：The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, diversity cultures can nurture our souls, promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making us life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being consuming. What is more, diversity cultures holds that exceptional significantly for world, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for shaping people’s morals, further propelling social stability and sustainable development.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：diversity cultures

批改：culture diversity

原文：activity

批改：改成副词actively

原文：diversity cultures

批改：culture diversity

批改：加so

原文：In brief, diversity cultures is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should activity promote and carry forward diversity cultures. Only by doing can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误，要注意正确区分词性；句式和语法方面，注意主谓一致问题，要正确使用从句。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好，还要注意主题词的正确表达。继续加油。

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