考研英语一2011年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的考研英语作文模板高分范文。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there are two tourists sitting on a boat and a worker operates it. Sadly, the tourists are still throwing rubbish into the river,even though there have been a mountains of rubbish floating on the river.Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that environment pollution caused by uncivil action is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, and two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost,our government pays great attention to the environment protection,because a ruinous environment is like a heavy chain that not only hinder our nation’s ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth,but also significantly affect its international image.What’s more,tragically,although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon,its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals,in their pursuit of their own convenience,have disregarded the importance of protecting environment.

How can we put an end to the problem of pollution caused by individual action?It is suggested by many that we need a package of measures,including placing great emphasis on cultivating good manners in junior and senior education and highlighting the importance of being civil when one is travelling.To make these measures more comprehensive,in reality,we also need to establish a powerful penalty system when someone throws rubbish in a wrong place.With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

老师这一版是我先写完之后让deepseek挑过语病的。麻烦老师改详细一点，这里面抛开模板需要我自己写的句子我参照完老师的建议之后可能就拿来背了。毕竟自己写的符合自己的思路

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：operates

批改：operating 这里要用非谓语形式

原文：a mountains of

批改：a mountain of

原文：As shown in the picture, there are two tourists sitting on a boat and a worker operates it. Sadly, the tourists are still throwing rubbish into the river,even though there have been a mountains of rubbish floating on the river.Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that environment pollution caused by uncivil action is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：hinder

批改：hinders 第三人称单数形式

原文：affect

批改：affects

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, and two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost,our government pays great attention to the environment protection,because a ruinous environment is like a heavy chain that not only hinder our nation’s ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth,but also significantly affect its international image.What’s more,tragically,although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon,its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals,in their pursuit of their own convenience,have disregarded the importance of protecting environment.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of pollution caused by individual action?It is suggested by many that we need a package of measures,including placing great emphasis on cultivating good manners in junior and senior education and highlighting the importance of being civil when one is travelling.To make these measures more comprehensive,in reality,we also need to establish a powerful penalty system when someone throws rubbish in a wrong place.With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图，但在以下几方面还需注意：

.细节：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

3.内容：这幅漫画中细节比较多，但最核心的内容比较明确，那就是旅游过程中游客的不恰当行为造成环境污染。该图显示水面上有一艘观光船，两个游客随手乱扔垃圾，水面上漂浮着各种各样的废弃物。很多考生拿到试卷后的第一反应就是写如何保护环境，再细心一点的考生就写成如何保护景区环境。可是，这幅图不仅要强调被破坏的环境，还要强调造成这种环境污染的缘由——游客甚至是人类的不恰当行为。这样表达文章意思才全面。

整体来看，作文理解了漫画内涵，段落框架明确，大体上与题目要求保持一致，但是在表达上还存在一定问题。从点评中可以看出作文中有一些表述不当之处，主要体现在词汇使用不当，同时也有一些主谓不一致等细节问题，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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