2021年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二大作文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2021年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clealy depicts the percentage breakdow of different exercise ways of residant in a certain city. Exercising alone takes the lead at 54.3%, followed by exercising with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as exercising with family and activities in club are also considered, accouting for 23.9% and 15.8%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as we all know the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health and choose to exercise alone. In addition, As the saying goes, “on life"s stage, pressue is alway present." Nowdays, individuals are compelled to confront immense life pressure,and such as a result, exercising with family and friends has emerged as their significant choice for alleviating pressure. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of individuals, sering as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：clealy

批改：修正拼写错误 “clearly”

原文：breakdow

批改：“breakdown”

原文：residant

批改：“residents”（复数形式，指代 “居民群体”）

原文：accouting

批改：此处无需现在分词，主语为并列结构，用谓语动词 “account”

原文：as we all know

批改：后面逗号

原文： pressue

批改：拼写错误 “pressure”

原文：alway

批改：拼写错误 “always”

原文：o

批改：首字母大写

原文：Nowdays

批改：“Nowadays”

原文：unsuprising

批改：修正拼写错误：“unsurprising”

原文：sering

批改：“serving”

原文：he bar chart clealy depicts the percentage breakdow of different exercise ways of residant in a certain city. Exercising alone takes the lead at 54.3%, followed by exercising with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as exercising with family and activities in club are also considered, accouting for 23.9% and 15.8%, respectively.

批改：描述图片内容，符合题目要求

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as we all know the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health and choose to exercise alone. In addition, As the saying goes, “on life"s stage, pressue is alway present." Nowdays, individuals are compelled to confront immense life pressure,and such as a result, exercising with family and friends has emerged as their significant choice for alleviating pressure. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising

批改：提出了自己的观点，使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，条理较为清晰

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of individuals, sering as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：推测未来趋势，符合结尾段的内容和结构

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

原文框架完整，准确捕捉了 “某城市居民不同锻炼方式占比” 的核心数据（独自锻炼占比最高，与朋友 / 家人锻炼、俱乐部活动占比次之），具备图表作文基本结构。但存在一些问题：语法 / 拼写错误频发（如 “clealy”“pressue”“unsuprising”），写完整体检查一遍，希望继续努力，加油！

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