考研英语一2024年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2024年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy standing in the park fitness area and saying, "The newly renovated park near my home is really nice!" Simultaneously, in the right-hand chart, the number of parks experienced a significant increase of 264 from 2020 to 2022.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue physical health. Engaging in physical activities,such as walking, running,and playing badminton in parks, not only relieves pressure but also promote a healthy lifestyle.This explains why an increasing number of them choose to exercise in the park,rather than staying at home. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made efforts to build many parks, enabling citizens to relax and exercise freely. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of exercise participants and that of parks will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy standing in the park fitness area and saying, "The newly renovated park near my home is really nice!" Simultaneously, in the right-hand chart, the number of parks experienced a significant increase of 264 from 2020 to 2022

批改：准确概括了图表内容

原文：promote

批改：promotes单三

原文：asons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue physical health. Engaging in physical activities,such as walking, running,and playing badminton in parks, not only relieves pressure but also promote a healthy lifestyle.This explains why an increasing number of them choose to exercise in the park,rather than staying at home. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made efforts to build many parks, enabling citizens to relax and exercise freely. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：论点清晰，词汇和句法丰富

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the number of exercise participants and that of parks will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：预测趋势，呼应主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/15分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，介词短语，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：已经能灵活运用模板，继续背诵，继续练习，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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