考研英语一2024年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2024年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left–hand cartoon， there are two adults running at a park，while a boy is content with the new park in the front of his house.In contrast，in the right– hand bar chart the number of park in certain city is 406 in 2020，but by 2022 the figure has substantially risen to 670.

After careful consideration the fundamental reasons of above phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with，as a conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes，Our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound urban environment system，enabling an increasing number of people can enjoy their personal lives.What is more ，more and more young people believe that in the modern society full of choices， changes and challenges，a healthy phsicque is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.It is obvious that if we take these factors into account， the phenomenon presented in chart will not come as a surprise.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of park will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：at

批改：“in a park”

原文：the

批改：“in front of” 为固定短语，表 “在…… 前面”，无需加 “the”

原文： the number of park

批改：改为 “the number of parks”（“the number of” 后接复数名词）

原文： is

批改： 改为 “was 406 in 2020”（2020 年为过去时间，用一般过去时）

原文：in certain city

批改：改为 “in a certain city”（补充不定冠词 “a”，表 “某一个城市”）

原文：phsicque

批改：“physique”

原文：the

批改：删去

原文：In the left–hand cartoon， there are two adults running at a park，while a boy is content with the new park in the front of his house.In contrast，in the right– hand bar chart the number of park in certain city is 406 in 2020，but by 2022 the figure has substantially risen to 670.

批改：描述图片内容，符合题目要求

原文：fter careful consideration the fundamental reasons of above phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with，as a conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes，Our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound urban environment system，enabling an increasing number of people can enjoy their personal lives.What is more ，more and more young people believe that in the modern society full of choices， changes and challenges，a healthy phsicque is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.It is obvious that if we take these factors into account， the phenomenon presented in chart will not come as a surprise.

批改：提出了自己的观点，条理较为清晰

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the number of park will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：总结全文，结尾段可以再补充一两句话

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16

准确解读图片，提炼核心趋势（城市公园普及 + 人们热衷公园活动），符合组合图表作文的核心要求。结构框架完整，逻辑脉络清晰。但是存在语法与拼写错误：存在基础拼写错误（phsicque）、固定搭配不当（in the front of）等问题，影响表达流畅度与专业性。希望继续努力，，加油！

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。