考研英语一2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文模板每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2016年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

① Casually and indifferently, a smoking father watching teleision promt his son with a pessimtic face to devote himsely into studing. in the left of picture. It is barely difficultfor us to figure out in the right on given above that both father and son have a single-minded time learing hardly at 9:00am. It is a striking morning call to send us a significant message that the pouer of exemplification has keen in the spotlight in current common familes. ②As the depiction shows, the most cardinal tip is related to the issue of the importante of beinga pioneer. A good case blowing in my mind now is Fulei, who is a notability in Chinese nistory writing a wealthy letter to his descendants. The main con tenat contained is how how to become a moral and humble person.His approach to nurture his kids is not merely aslim loter, but his self-reminding discipline as well in aily life. Educating students has been atendad to every corner of our society. The second but value classroom is home in which adolescents imitate their parents" daily beharior unconsciously and now it is necessary for parents to become a standard of their chirdren.

③ All analyes presented above convince parents that worse offect wil be produce by making much more requests to your kids Yet parents challenging to become an exemplification at hom will lestrict kids many vices in tangibly and deliver the moderate lifte outlook to guide tham both physically and mentally.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：eis

批改：the television

原文：omt

批改：prompts

原文：si

批改：pessimistic

原文：ims

批改：himself

原文：tud

批改：study

原文：of

批改：删掉

批改：删掉句号

原文：ltf

批改：注意空格

原文：on

批改：picture

原文：arin

批改：learning

原文：ouer of exemplificat

批改：good example

原文： face to devote himsely into studing. in the left of picture. It is barely difficultfor us to figure out in the right on given above that both father and son have a single-minded time learing hardly at 9:00am. It is a striking morning call to send us a significant message that the pouer of exemplification has keen in the spotlight in current common familes.

批改：第一段描述漫画看似用的句子很长，复杂句也有，单词写的很高级，但实际读起来很累，比较乱，问题在于考生没有熟练运用句子的能力，在这种情况下，要么背诵完整的一篇范文，一个标点都不能错，要么就写简单句，主谓宾，主系表这种哦。

原文：ga

批改：空格

原文：ist

批改：history

原文：on ten

批改：content

原文：contained

批改：删掉

原文：how

批改：删掉

原文：aslim loter

批改：这个单词是不是写错了，这是想写啥呢

原文：as well in aily life

批改：这几个单词都错了，是不是拼错了，想写啥呢 ，有点不知所云

原文：enda

批改：extended

原文：har

批改：behavior

原文： his descendants. The main con tenat contained is how how to become a moral and humble person.His approach to nurture his kids is not merely aslim loter, but his self-reminding discipline as well in aily life. Educating students has been atendad to every corner of our society. The second but value classroom is home in which adolescents imitate their parents" daily beharior unconsciously and now it is necessary for parents to become a standard of their chirdr

批改：其实内容是可以的，但是问题还是第一段的问题，句子结构写的比较乱，有一两句不知所云，单词背诵不牢固，

原文：alye

批改：analysis

原文：ffe

批改：effect

原文：i

批改：will

原文：oduce

批改：produced

原文：ids

批改：加句号

原文：nts challenging to become an exemplification at hom will lestrict kids many vices in tangibly and deliver the moderate lifte outlook to guide tham both physically and mentally.

批改：这一单词几乎都错了，是不是没背诵牢固啊，考生可以再加强背诵，重写哦

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/20

语法：语法上的问题在于你的句子写的不规范，单词，表述，固定搭配错的比较多，考生还没有掌握如何写作文，不是背诵了一篇文章就写的哦，要么就背诵完整，一个标点，单词都不错，要么好好学习语法知识，写简单句。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，内容不是很通顺。

词汇：单词整体还行，但是写错了单词哦，注意一些词汇使用的适当性哦。

内容：内容比较符合英文作文写作要求，结构合理。

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