考研英语一2011年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there are two people throwing rubbish into dirty lake ,when they are rowing. Evidently, the picture intends to conveyto readers that environment pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and society.

This phenomenon is thougt-provoking in several ways, but two of them is particularly important. First and foremost, neglecting environment protection is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image. What"s more, tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economjc intersts, have disregards the importance of environment protection.

How can we put an end to the problem of lake pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including stregthening moral education and issuing related regulations. But would these measures be comorehensive enough? In reality, we also need to enhance supervision. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：there are two people throwing rubbish into dirty lake ,when they are rowing.

批改：语法没问题，但是描写的顺序改一下会更还，可改为 there are two tourists, sitting on a boat, enjoying the scenery and throwing garbage into the water, which pollutes the river. 这样来表达

原文：conveyto

批改：两个单词之间加空格

原文：environment

批改：此处为形容词，改为 environmental

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

原文：thougt

批改：thought

原文：environment

批改：此处为形容词，改为 environmental

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

原文：environment

批改：此处为形容词，改为 environmental

原文：economjc

批改：economic

原文：intersts

批改：interests

原文：disregards

批改：现在完成时 是 have/ has done, 此处要改为动词的过去分词，即 disregarded

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：lake

批改：改为 environmental

原文：comorehensive

批改：comprehensive

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2.拼写要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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