考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2016年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of traveling

among students at a certain university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, cultivating independence, and other purposes are also considered, accounting for 9%,6%,and 15%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a harmonious ecological system, enabling university students to experience the beauty and peacefulness of nature through travel. In addition， as the saying goes,“On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon i he chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that th e above s tatistical figures acurately and

truthfully reflec t the choices of univers ity students, serving as a m icrocosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： i he

批改：改为 in the

原文：acurately

批改：单词拼写错误，改为 accurately

原文： th e

批改：一个单词中间无故空格，检查下文类似错误

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

从结构层面看，本文脉络清晰，采用三段式写作，开头清楚表明图片，中间进行了分析，最后做出了总结；

从内容层面看，全文使用了高级词汇和比喻，逻辑流畅；

从语言层面看，一处单词拼写错误；还有格式上的问题，单词中间不能有空格。

建议：检查单词拼写，全文与范文高度相似，尽量多使用自己的语言，在模板句的基础上，去替换一些词、短语、副词、形容词，加油！。

考研英语二真题写作提分高效的方式，是让经验丰富的老师亲自批改你的作文。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，主讲斌哥亲批每一份学员作业，真题作业批改、轻松应对各种复杂题目，让考研英语写作更有底。