考研英语二2011年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

本文将启航教育一对一批改过的2011年考研英语二高分范文进行公开呈现。批改老师对文中每一个失分细节进行了精确标注，对照考研英语写作模板热点话题与评分细则，你可以快速了解考研英语写作的提分方向。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the brands of automobile in domestic automobile market. The percentage of domestic brands was approximately 26% in 2008, but by 2009, this figure has risen to around 32%. In contrast, the percentage of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of around 10% during the same time. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained relatively stable.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the young generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to useing domestic automobiles and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprisingly.

What about future trends? I am confident that the figure of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the percentage of abroad brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：brands of automobile

批改：图表展示的是国内轿车市场部分品牌市场份额，这里的表述应改为the market shares of automobile brands

原文：has

批改：到2009年应该用过去完成时had

原文：populace

批改：表示民众，前面要加the

原文：1990s

批改：表示年代，前面要加the

原文：2000s

批改：表示年代，前面要加the

原文：useing

批改：using

原文：unsurprisingly

批改：这里要用形容词unsurprising

原文：figure

批改：图表里展示的是份额，用percentage更恰当~

原文：abroad

批改：abroad是副词，这里要用形容词foreign

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the brands of automobile in domestic automobile market. The percentage of domestic brands was approximately 26% in 2008, but by 2009, this figure has risen to around 32%. In contrast, the percentage of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of around 10% during the same time. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained relatively stable.

批改：对图表的描述较为详细，注意个别表达可以改进

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the young generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to useing domestic automobiles and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprisingly.

批改：从政策和消费者两个方面解释了图表中的现象，注意个别用词

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the figure of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the percentage of abroad brands will likely continue to decrease.

批改：表达个人观点，注意个别用词

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10

题目要求：对图表信息的描述可以再准确一些，个人观点及论述部分符合题意；

语言表达：全文借鉴了一些范文原句和模板句，但存在一些语法错误和词汇错误，表达效果有待提高；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容，第二段给出详细论述，第三段表达个人观点，整体架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；注意单词的词性和冠词的使用；

总体来说还可以，期待下一篇更好~

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