考研英语二2011年大作文写作方向与示例

当你坐在考研英语二考场，面对2011年大作文题目的那一瞬间，是否能快速组织起一篇结构清晰、表达地道的高分文章？本文这篇批改例文，正是考研英语二作文模板话题下的标准范本，适合每一位考研英语备考生反复研读。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The chart vividly indicates an excited change of the domestic cars’portion.Among these,in 2008,the portion of Japan’s car is the largest,while the portion of domestic cars acount for 25%.In 2009,the portion of domestic cars had became the largest.

Not until I saw the chart did I realize the excited change,which can be structured around two aspects.primarily,Amidst the whirlwind technological development of our country,we have the ability to produce high-level vehicles .Furthermore,the change can be attritured to the country’s politic support.the root cause,however,lies in the fact that populace are increasingly recognizing the significance of the development of domestic cars.

Although,the change of domestic cars is charmful, we need to take more actions to maintain the development of domestic cars.We,as student,are supposed to study diligently ,expecially learning the regarding knowledge of cars.The local administration need to invest more resources and funding in proving the development of domestic cars.Only by doing these practical actions can we ensure that the dometic cars will have more promising future.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Japan’s

批改：Japanese

原文：acount

批改：accounts 第三人称单数形式

原文：portion

批改：proportion 表示比例，占比。portion表示一部分，这里应该用proportion

原文：portion

批改：proportion

原文：portion

批改：proportion

原文：portion

批改：proportion

原文：The chart vividly indicates an excited change of the domestic cars’portion.Among these,in 2008,the portion of Japan’s car is the largest,while the portion of domestic cars acount for 25%.In 2009,the portion of domestic cars had became the largest.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：primarily,

批改：注意首字母大写

原文：Amidst

批改：首字母小写

原文：the

批改：首字母大写

原文：Not until I saw the chart did I realize the excited change,which can be structured around two aspects.primarily,Amidst the whirlwind technological development of our country,we have the ability to produce high-level vehicles .Furthermore,the change can be attritured to the country’s politic support.the root cause,however,lies in the fact that populace are increasingly recognizing the significance of the development of domestic cars.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：student

批改：students 建议用复数形式

原文：expecially

批改：especially

原文：in proving

批改：in improving

原文：dometic

批改：domestic

原文：Although,the change of domestic cars is charmful, we need to take more actions to maintain the development of domestic cars.We,as student,are supposed to study diligently ,expecially learning the regarding knowledge of cars.The local administration need to invest more resources and funding in proving the development of domestic cars.Only by doing these practical actions can we ensure that the dometic cars will have more promising future.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，从点评中可以看出作文中有一些表述不当之处，基本是由汉语思维习惯而造成的表达错误，主要体现在词汇使用和搭配不当，句子成分缺失混乱，同时也有一些前后一致等细节问题，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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