2014年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2014年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the population of towns and rural areas in China during 20 years. In 1990, the population of town areas was 300 million,but by 2010, this figure had substaintially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the population of rural areas experienced a significant increase of 160 million during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system, enabling rural residents to have ample opportunities to find jobs in towns. In addition, an increasing number of young people who live in rural areas believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, working in towns is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the population of towns will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the population of rural areas will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the population of towns and rural areas in China during 20 years

批改：描述不准确，改为the changes in China’s urban and rural population from 1990 to 2010.

原文：population of town areas

批改：urban population

原文： population of rural areas

批改： rural population

原文：increase

批改：逻辑不通，农村人口是下降的

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the population of towns and rural areas in China during 20 years. In 1990, the population of town areas was 300 million,but by 2010, this figure had substaintially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the population of rural areas experienced a significant increase of 160 million during the same period.

批改：对图表内容的描述不准确

原文：substaintially

批改：substantially

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system, enabling rural residents to have ample opportunities to find jobs in towns. In addition, an increasing number of young people who live in rural areas believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, working in towns is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：论点清晰，词汇和句法丰富

原文：population of towns

批改：urban population

原文：population of rural areas

批改：rural population

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the population of towns will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the population of rural areas will likely continue to decrease.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，第一段需要改进，第二段与模板的结合很棒；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，状语从句和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要继续消化吸老师的模板，灵活运用在各类写作题目中，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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