考研英语一2013年大作文实例分析与批改

备战2013年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语一写作高分规划。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are graduates,

standing the road of life and facing some choices,

which include making a work, continuing learn, going abroad and making a new company. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is truly choice that play an important and postive role both in our persoral lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particulary significant. First and foremost, truly choice can ignite our creativity, and promote

personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What is more,

In modern society full of changes, and challenges, choice right road and persevere it has become a key factor that distinguishes

exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its singnificance has become increasingly evident.

In brief, turly choice is the catalyst for personal development,from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively

support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential and fullfill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加at

原文：making a work

批改：改成finding a job，work不可数不能用a修饰

批改：加to

原文：making a new company

批改：starting up business

原文：truly

批改：改成形容词appropriate修饰名词choice，

原文：play

批改：plays

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there are graduates, standing the road of life and facing some choices, which include making a work, continuing learn, going abroad and making a new company. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is truly choice that play an important and postive role both in our persoral lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：truly

批改：appropriate

原文：choice

批改：改成动名词做主语choosing

原文：persevere

批改：persevering

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particulary significant. First and foremost, truly choice can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What is more, In modern society full of changes, and challenges, choice right road and persevere it has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its singnificance has become increasingly evident.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：turly

批改：appropriate

原文：In brief, turly choice is the catalyst for personal development,from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential and fullfill our aspirations.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意区分词性以及词性之间的正确修饰关系；语法方面，注意动名词做主语。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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