2019年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2019年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depict s different choices of graduates in 2013 and 2018 at a certain university. In 2013, the percentage of looking for a work was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of choosing to further education experienced a significant increase about 7.7% during the same period, Simultaneously, the percentage of start own firms increasing from 1.3% to 2.6%.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further educations. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in morden society full of changes, challenges and chances, adventure is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of going for further education will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of looking for a work will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：depict

批改：depicts 第三人称单数形式

原文：s

批改：删除

原文：work

批改：job 这里要用可数名词job，work是不可数名词

原文：to

批改：删除

原文：start

批改：starting 介词后面要接ing形式

原文：increasing

批改：increased

原文：The bar chart clearly depict s different choices of graduates in 2013 and 2018 at a certain university. In 2013, the percentage of looking for a work was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of choosing to further education experienced a significant increase about 7.7% during the same period, Simultaneously, the percentage of start own firms increasing from 1.3% to 2.6%.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：educations

批改：education

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further educations. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in morden society full of changes, challenges and chances, adventure is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：work

批改：job

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of going for further education will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of looking for a work will likely continue to decrease.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

语法：语言表达和语法基础上，进步的空间还很大。比如本次作文中出现多次的单词拼写错误等问题，会很拉低你的平均分。另外还需要注意一些基础的语法问题和表达搭配问题，有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

首段总体概括图表主题，详细列出关键数据变化，突出就业比例下降、升学比例上升的趋势；第二段分析原因，可从政府鼓励深造、社会就业压力增大、学生追求自我实现等方面进行论述；第三段评论与展望，预测未来趋势可能持续，并强调其对个人和社会发展的积极意义。

文章整体来说，言简意赅，符合了考试写作提纲的要求，文章表示语义衔接的词语运用不太多，在以后的写作中可以多尝试使用一些表示衔接的词语，这样文章段落内部句内和段落之间的关系就能很明朗的表现出来。同时注意避免单纯罗列数据，可适当引用社会现象或政策背景支持分析，增强说服力。

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