思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向,本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面,逐段展示了一篇考研英语作文真题范文高分范文的诞生过程。
一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the rates of cars’ brand in China. In 2008, the percentage of cars made in China was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the rate had gradually risen to 33%. In contrast, the proportion of cars made in Japan experienced a significant decline of 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of cars made in US remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation, In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car industry in responding to these changes. In addition, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign can will likely continue to decrease.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:cars’ brand
批改:car brands 即可
原文:US
批改:前缺少定冠词(应为 “the US”)
原文:,
批改:句号
原文:A
批改:逗号后首字母小写
原文:can
批改:“cars”
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the rates of cars’ brand in China. In 2008, the percentage of cars made in China was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the rate had gradually risen to 33%. In contrast, the proportion of cars made in Japan experienced a significant decline of 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of cars made in US remained stable
批改:描述图片内容,符合题目要求
原文:e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation, In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car industry in responding to these changes. In addition, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:提出自己的观点,使用了一些表示逻辑关系的连接词,条理较为清晰
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign can will likely continue to decrease.
批改:预测未来的趋势,符合结尾段的内容和结构
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12
原文框架完整,能准确捕捉 “2008-2009 年中国汽车市场国产汽车占比上升、日系下降、美系稳定” 的核心趋势,但存在个别问题,注意一些细节上的小问题,写完整体检查一遍。希望继续努力,加油!
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