考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2017年考研英语一备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语一大作文话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语一高分写作模板。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

Unfolding before our eyes is an enlightening scene: One boy is lying on the chair, saying that he has many books, while the other boy is reading books carefully, saying that he is trying to read twenty books in this year. The caption indicates "Having Books and Reading Books."

Not until I saw this drawing did I realize the significance of action, which can be understood from the following several aspects. First and foremost, it is a truth widely acknowledged that all other factors being equal, hard-working could be the decisive difference between success or not. In addition, a timely action exerts remarkable influence on the development of personal character. A proper example is Tu Youyou, a brilliant scientist and Nobel Laureate, whose success stems largely from her emphasis on hard-working

Taking into account what has been argued, we can conclude that hard-working is crucial, and more actious need to be taken. To be specific, education institutions should provide guidence to infuse such an indispensable virtue into everyone. As President Xi once put it, "empty talk would lead a country astray, and hard work can revitalize a nation. The more rapidly actions are taken, the more effectively this virtue will benefit us in the upcoming future.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： in this year.

批改：英语中 “this/that/next/last + 时间名词” 前，通常不加介词 in/on/at 所以删除in

原文：between success or not.

批改：没有这种说法 between success or not，一般搭配：between... and ...，改为between success and failure.

原文：hard-working

批改：hard-working 是形容词，不能做主语。改为名词 hard work

原文： hard-working

批改：同上，hard-working是形容词，介词on后面一般用名词/动名词/代词，改为 hard work

原文： actious

批改：单词拼写错误，改为 actions。

原文：hard-working

批改：同上，改为 hard work

原文：guidence

批改：单词拼写错误，改为 guidance。

原文：empty talk would lead a country astray, and hard work can revitalize a nation.

批改：引用名人名言，很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

从结构层面看，本文脉络清晰，三段式写作，开头清楚表明图片，中间进行分析，最后做出总结。

从内容层面看，引用屠呦呦的例子和名人名言，内容丰富具体。

从语言层面看，单词和语法均有小错误，比如this year 前不加in 、词性辨析， 之后要注意细节。

建议：检查单词拼写，注意语法知识。可以看出基础不错，因为全是自己想法组织的句子，接下来提高句子的准确性，加油！

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