考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文模板每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2017年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a youngster, lying in front of a bookshelf and saying, “I have so many books.” On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, another youngster is making an annual reading plan that he will try to read 20 books this year. Evidently, the cartoonist tends to convey readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while indulging in wishful thinking is the shackle that hinders our progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, being practical has become a key quality that distinguish exceptional individual from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. On the other hand, indulging in wishful thinking is like a heavy chain that hinders our progress. It can waste our precious time, deplete our energy, and even undermine our motivation to improve ourselves.

In brief, being practical is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should support and advocate this quality; additionally, we must acutely aware of the detrimental effects of indulging in wishful thinking to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加to

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a youngster, lying in front of a bookshelf and saying, “I have so many books.” On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, another youngster is making an annual reading plan that he will try to read 20 books this year. Evidently, the cartoonist tends to convey readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while indulging in wishful thinking is the shackle that hinders our progress.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：distinguish

批改：distinguishes

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, being practical has become a key quality that distinguish exceptional individual from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. On the other hand, indulging in wishful thinking is like a heavy chain that hinders our progress. It can waste our precious time, deplete our energy, and even undermine our motivation to improve ourselves.

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

原文：In brief, being practical is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should support and advocate this quality; additionally, we must acutely aware of the detrimental effects of indulging in wishful thinking to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：该段再次总结强调写作的中心，起到了点题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，注意句子结构的完整，不要缺少成分；语法方面，注意定语从句中谓语的正确使用。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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