考研英语一2011年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

Unfolding before our eyes is an enlighting scene: On the lake, lies a boat with many travlers. But there are lots of rubbish floating nearby, too. The caption indicates "The Remaining of Travel".

Not until I saw this drawing did I realize the significance of environment, which can be understood from the following three aspects. Firstly, in this rapidly developing world, many people are becoming increasingly selfish. leading to drop little carelessly. Secondly, the local administrations, failing to enact some well-enforced laws and regulations, make it harder to deeply practice the environmental protection concept conveyed by the drawing. Finally, we are living in a world with common interest, and since environment exerts remarkable influence to our shared community.

Altogether, effective measures should be taken to reverse the grim situation. The key to addressing this issue is to promote widespread social moral education, ensuring that individuals fully recognize the importance of the environmental protection. If we want to avoid making similar mistakes in the future, everybody should make a change.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：enlighting

批改：enlightening

原文：,

批改：逗号去掉

原文：travlers

批改：travelers

原文：are

批改：rubbish通常不可数，are改成is

原文：Unfolding before our eyes is an enlighting scene: On the lake, lies a boat with many travlers. But there are lots of rubbish floating nearby, too. The caption indicates "The Remaining of Travel".

批改：能够完整描述出图画中的内容，语言连贯，注意避免小的语言错误。

批改：逗号

原文：little

批改：litter

原文：Not until I saw this drawing did I realize the significance of environment, which can be understood from the following three aspects. Firstly, in this rapidly developing world, many people are becoming increasingly selfish. leading to drop little carelessly. Secondly, the local administrations, failing to enact some well-enforced laws and regulations, make it harder to deeply practice the environmental protection concept conveyed by the drawing. Finally, we are living in a world with common interest, and since environment exerts remarkable influence to our shared community.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：Altogether, effective measures should be taken to reverse the grim situation. The key to addressing this issue is to promote widespread social moral education, ensuring that individuals fully recognize the importance of the environmental protection. If we want to avoid making similar mistakes in the future, everybody should make a change.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯，但是要注意正确使用标点断句；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。