作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2010年考研英语一大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语一真题常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目
考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文
As shown in the cartoon, there is a boiling hot pot, filled with many cultural elements, including Lao She, kung fu, Shakespeare and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is cultural mix that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in Society.
This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, paying more attention to cultural mix can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the Other hand, neglecting cultural mix is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation’s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image
In brief, cultural mix is the catalyst for personal and societal development, from with we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing So can we develop individual potential, create a happier life, and make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:As shown in the cartoon, there is a boiling hot pot, filled with many cultural elements, including Lao She, kung fu, Shakespeare and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is cultural mix that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in Society.
批改:太棒了,描述相当准确
原文:This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, paying more attention to cultural mix can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the Other hand, neglecting cultural mix is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation’s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image
批改:论据充分,词汇和句法丰富
原文:Other
批改:首字母小写
原文:with
批改:which
原文:So
批改:首字母小写
原文:Society
批改:首字母小写
原文:In brief, cultural mix is the catalyst for personal and societal development, from with we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing So can we develop individual potential, create a happier life, and make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
批改:good
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:16/20分。
1. 题目要求:作文内容包含全面,主题明确,层次分明;
2. 语言表达:运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇,强调句,定语从句,非谓语结构和倒装句很棒;
3. 行文逻辑:采用恰当的衔接手法,行文流畅,内容连贯;
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