考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作技巧话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chort clearly depicts the shares of partly brand market among can"s market in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of brands of making in China was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of brands of making in Japan experienced a significant deline of about 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of brands of making in America remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the oiserved phenomenon can be summanized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of brands of making in China is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of making in Japan will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：chort

批改： 拼写错误（应为 “chart”）

原文：partly brand

批改：表达错误（应为 “major brands”）

原文：can"s market

批改：拼写错误（应为 “China"s car market”）

原文：brands of making in China

批改：表达不规范（应为 “domestic brands”）

原文：brands of making in Japan

批改：表达不规范（应为 “Japanese brands”）

原文：deline

批改：拼写错误（应为 “decline”）

原文：brands of making in America

批改：表达不规范（应为 “American brands”）

原文： oiserved

批改：拼写错误（应为 “observed”）

原文：summanized

批改：拼写错误（应为 “summarized”）

原文：A

批改：逗号后首字母小写

原文：brands of making in China

批改：“domestic brands”

原文：making in Japan

批改：“Japanese brands”

原文：The bar chort clearly depicts the shares of partly brand market among can"s market in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of brands of making in China was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of brands of making in Japan experienced a significant deline of about 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of brands of making in America remained stable and steady.

批改：描述图表内容，符合题目要求

原文：The core reasons for the oiserved phenomenon can be summanized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：提出了自己的观点，使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，条理较为清晰

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of brands of making in China is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of making in Japan will likely continue to decrease.

批改：预测未来趋势，符合结尾段的内容和结构

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

这篇图表分析文框架完整，能准确捕捉 “2008-2009 年中国汽车市场品牌份额变化” 的核心趋势，但存在一些问题：一是拼写错误频发（如 “chort”“deline”“summanized”），基础表达不规范；二是核心概念表述冗余（如 “brands of making in China”），用词精准度不足；写完整体检查一下，希望继续努力，加油！

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