考研英语一2017年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2017年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语写作冲刺的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left cartoon, there is a man sitting in front of a bookshelf and saying he has so many books. On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, a boy is sitting beside the desk, reading books and saying he will read twenty books this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that practice is the brush that paints a bright future, while just talking without practice is the shackle that hinders progress.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, practice can ignite out creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, just talking without practice is not only merely a chronic poison that stifles potential, but also the Achilles" heel of many youth. It silently erodes opportunities while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide.

In brief, practice is the catalyst for societal and personal development from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental efforts of talking without practice to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In the left cartoon, there is a man sitting in front of a bookshelf and saying he has so many books. On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, a boy is sitting beside the desk, reading books and saying he will read twenty books this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that practice is the brush that paints a bright future, while just talking without practice is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, practice can ignite out creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, just talking without practice is not only merely a chronic poison that stifles potential, but also the Achilles" heel of many youth. It silently erodes opportunities while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide.

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

批改：加逗号断句

原文：In brief, practice is the catalyst for societal and personal development from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental efforts of talking without practice to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：该段再次总结强调写作的中心，起到了点题的作用

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯，注意正确使用标点断句；语法方面，注语法基础很好。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬，继续加油。

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